Wednesday, May 11, 2011

Fatherhood ought to be emphasized as much as motherhood. The idea that women are solely responsible for deciding whether or not to have babies leads on to the idea that they are also responsible for bringing the children up.

Parents play a very important role in children’s lives. Therefore in the first glance, it’s very difficult for us to draw a quick conclusion that fatherhood ought to be emphasized as much as motherhood is wrong or right.
Some people believe that mothers give birth a baby, so there are more responsible for their children than fathers. But others may hold another opinion about it.

I personally think, mothers and fathers both are responsible for their children equally.
Nowadays, life style is changing and mothers and fathers have to work outside homes. They should work long hours for providing their financial requirements. In this way, it’s very difficult for parents to bring their children up in the right way and spend more time with them.

Today, grandparents bring up the children. It’s not a very good idea, because parents are the best teachers for their children and nothing can be compared with their roles. Although women are more involved than men in children’s lives, both of them should spend plenty of their time with their kids.
We can see, children from good and nuclear families have more chances to succeed in the future life, because the relationship between members of the family is very important and can affect children’s lives, behaviors and reactions.
Working outside and making money isn’t enough for whole family and money can’t buy important experiences, good behaviors and emotional feelings.

Taking into account of all these factors, we may the conclusion that women aren’t solely responsible for children or deciding whether or not to have babies. Both men and women are responsible for their lives and children’s lives and these are their duties. So I think, they should be ready to have a baby and accept all responsibilities.


  1. I personally think that the second paragraph should be placed together with the first one. Otherwise, it would be too short to be a paragraph like that.

  2. u know , that is what i call performance....nice

    u wrote nice n gud

  3. if i sy woman is more responsible than a man for bringing the children up.but i also sy both r responsible for deciding wether or not to have babies not solely responsible a can we write in dis way?

  4. it has been written very good. but let me know one thing .
    Is it not compulsory to give examples ??
    because what my ielts teacher says that it is mantadory to write at least two examples in body paragraph (2,3)
    .Please reply on my email if anyone can , its

  5. harpreet,

    There's nothing compulsory except perhaps to have an Introduction, Body and Conclusion.

    Examples are good ways of elaborating on your points and topic sentences. I always recommend that my students write at least one example in their essays.

  6. i know examples are not needed in a paragragh when reading all your doing is lerant knowlege.....strive for aquired knowlege, when you get this completly youll understand why.